Another Poem (Wht u think?) ITS DONE READ IT please give feedback if u read it

[Jace123]

The sound of your voice, a joke a conversation-
The most simple things can change the weight of an entire day.

You are the light in the room when its dark.
a sign of peace in the chaos

I never thought when i met you
my whole world begin to change
like something missing finally found

I try to describe this feeling
but i can't-
I'm tongue twisted
lost in thoughts that rush faster than I can hold them
sweeping me away and leaving me astray

Every time I reach for it,
it slips through my hands again

Yet you remain-
an anchor in rough tides,
keeping me steady when I drift too far.

This feeling is so unfamiliar to me.
this caring, passion this kindness I cant fully understand.

It overwhelms me.
pulling me in but pushing me back at the same time..

When I put up walls to you defences built from fear.
You dont break them-
You simply find a way through.
Like you were never ment to be kept out.

You don't take advantage of my vulnerability.
You welcome it.
You understand it.

And when I was lost, you found me
You know the pain of being used
Of feeling broken and confused
Yet you choose to stay with me

You bring calm when the chaos starts
And stitch together the fractured parts
A world once painted gray and cold
Now filled with colors shine and bold

And though theses verses try there best
The truth remains within by chest
No rhyme or line could quite convey
The gratitude I feel today.

For few words could ever describe you
Or all the things you help me through
Yet if one truth remains to say-
I'm grateful that you came my way

(I tried to spell everything corret because I have shaky hands so it took a very long time i know some people dont understand that but thats ok I hope you guys like it let me know what you think love everyone)

[4R14]

this is actually amazing

[4R14]

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[Jace123]

@4R14 thanks reread it im done

[Jace123]

hope u like it it took a while

[Jace123]

@FlavPlaz45129 wht do u think

[FlavPlaz45129]

@Jace123 I LIKE IT!!! W JACE!

[Jace123]

thank u

[foxyfemboy]

not bad u did amazing

[Jace123]

@foxyfemboy thank you

[Jace123]

lmk how i can improve

[Jace123]

@FlavPlaz45129 how can improve tho

[FlavPlaz45129]

@Jace123 I don't exactly know. You already have perfect grammar.

[Jace123]

@FlavPlaz45129 said in Another Poem (Wht u think?) ITS DONE READ IT please give feedback if u read it:

@Jace123 I don't exactly know. You already have perfect grammar.

Yeah i always do i have tremors so its hard to type perfectly all the times like i wamt feedback if u see anythng tht is lackng in my poems

[FlavPlaz45129]

@Jace123 Nah man I think you're good.

[Jace123]

thank u man

[Jace123]

@foxyfemboy do you have any recommendations on how i can improve

[Jace123]

i need feedback

[welcome2myworld]

Roses are red,
Summer is hot,
"I like you Mrs. Barenger, i like you a lot."

[welcome2myworld]

Roses are red,
Hatred must end,
"You must never refer to Japanese people as our little yellow friend!"